I+hear...singing

 I hear our economy crying, over the varied problems it endures, The family crying as they're emptying their foreclosed home, Wall Street crying as it goes more into the negative, The middle-class crying as they live paycheck to paycheck, The people of America crying as they lose another job, We're crying, dreading the day our economy will collapse. -Tyler & Erica This is really good.



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 I hear the mother weep as she chauffeurs her children around town watching her gas tank go empty ======

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 I hear my neighbors weep as they struggle to pay their bills, hoping for an easier tomorrow ======

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 I hear the teachers weep while cuts are being made and second jobs become not enough ======

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 The students begin to weep hoping for nothing more but a reliable education while questioning their future ======

- Lauren & Gavin
Really good insight -- You have a few spelling and comma errors, but your effort is superb.


I Hear the Nation Groaning

I hear the nation groaning, the simultaneous cries of pain and regret, Those of Big Oil, groaning under the weight of dishonest money, Of politicians, groaning under the weight of their web of deceits, Of the worker, groaning under the weight of the realization that mistakes were made that could not be amended, Of the consumer, groaning under the knowledge that a day shall come, Of the producers, under that same knowledge that money is finite, Of the bystanders, groaning under the stress of waiting before the pounce on society, Of the parent, groaning from the stress of their futile attempts to make a better life for their children, out of a ruined husk of mankind, Thinkers, who can say much and accomplish nothing, Speakers, who lacks the thoughts to change what he can, Entertainers, who can do little to restore the happiness of those they serve, without detaching them from what is true, And over it all, i hear the children, who, not knowing what they know, understand that life is about to change. Zach Really wonderful. Excellent use of vocabulary and imagery. Capitalize I; speakers is plural, lacks is singular and he is singular.

“I see corruptive consumerism” <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">I see consumers purchasin<span style="color: rgb(244, 16, 16)">g, th eir lives revolve around paychecks, A family, falling into debt, their house reaped from them due to plastic cash, A businessman, scamming his employees for the almighty dollar, A gang, killing a friend of yours for his wallet, A terrorist organization, attacking bank buildings for their monetary benefits, A government, choking citizens for money to supply underground beneficiaries. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">--Dan Stern <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Nice job. Change your punctuation in line 2. House "ripped" from them?

I see my family running, in all different marathons of life, A mother runs from responsibility, from the hurt she has acquired in her heart, A father, running from depression, searches for brightness up ahead, A sister from reality, sheltering herself from our truth, A brother is running from his hurt, searching for a way to let it out, A girl runs to her future, hoping it holds for her a much better fate. --Julia <span style="color: rgb(241, 9, 9)"> <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Really good insight and description-- You even use the elliptical construction your fourth line.

<span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">I see my Key Club helping <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif"> <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">Kiera is planning the walk-a-thons and fundraisers, I see my Key Club helping. <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">Samantha is aiding the elderly and the youth of the community. <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">Ms. McKeever is guiding the members and the officers of Key Club. <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">Glenn is deciding for the members and with the members. <span style="font-family: Georgia,serif">Nikita is caring for others as wells as himself. ~Glenn Funk and Nikita Ladyzhensky. <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">I appreciate your description, but you should have continued with the style of Whitman. Look at the construction he uses.

I Hear the Sounds of the Basketball Game I hear Michael Jordan dunking the ball through the hoop. I hear Kobe Bryant wetting a three in your eye. I hear Allen Iverson crossing the defender on the court. I hear Shaq swatting the ball in the stands. I hear Kevin Garnet banging his head on the goal post. ~Murfad Cofer Jamie Rico <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Your subject is not quite as important nor as symbolic as Whitman's.

I hear the Band Playing I hear the band playing, Mr. C waving his arms to the beat. I hear Julia playing the glorious melodies, Kris beating on the drum. I hear the tone played by Matt, the tuba bright and full. I hear Zac wailing on the sax, Roberto plucking bass in the background. I hear the lost rhythm’s of the past times, people who make the art possible. I hear myself playing music, loving every minute of it. -Josh Senften <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Excellent construction. I really like your third line. I hear my school laughing; I hear the nerds laughing as they read their books and complete their math problems; I hear the jocks laughing as they throw their footballs and flirt with the cheerleaders; I hear the preps laughing as they put on their lip gloss and wear their Ralph Lauren polos ; I hear the goths laughing as they read their anime and apply their black eyeliner. --Rachel and Katie <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Good -- what is anime? Polos should be capitalized.

I hear an individual crying for happiness and love I hear a family crying for peace and comfort I hear a community crying for strength and faith I hear a nation crying for unity and dedication I hear a world crying for the war to end and the economy to be better -By Deanna & Kellie <span style="color: rgb(239, 11, 11)">Super subject and understanding of your subject. Use end punctuation.

I hear my family scream with thoughts of pain as they search for happiness i hear my family think of the future as they feel pain from the past i hear my family stress as they find a way to live i hear my family talk about problems as they try to fix them i hear my family love through all the steps of life -trang le- <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Excellent -- Always capitalize I and use end punctuation.

I HEAR THE CLASS CRYING By Werica dos Santos & Brad Ellis I hear Molly crying about the Scarlet Letter, as she tries to understand it and worries about the test Susie gasps at the extensive vocabulary and struggles with the American Literature presentation John groans at the personal narrative because nothing has marked his life, he can’t figure out how to write a poem Mrs. Sisemore is shocked at this situation as she studies the student’s reactions But now I can hear the class adapting, after talking it all out, to the teacher’s methods and structures

<span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">Good subject and good description. Use end punctuation

<span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'">I hear my country crying. The melancholy songs of my nation bring sadness to my heart. Its strife turns my dreams into nightmares. I hear the people crying. The families grievance for the unclear future. I see myself crying. The understanding of an arduous path that lies ahead of me causes me to cringe at the very sight. My future questionable, my family doubtful of this countries promise of better days through better ways. An assurance I cannot put my life on the line for. Cassandra Britus <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)"> Excellent description. -- I wish you had divided your lines like a poem. I would be interested to see where you chose to put your line breaks. You have some good parallel construction. <span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'"> I hear the gridiron's anthem: I hear the defense growling when they tackle the running back to the ground I hear the running backs foot steps as he high steps to the endzone I hear the quarterback whistle the football right to the reciever's numbers. I hear the wide reciver fall to the ground as he makes the catch for the winning touchdown I hear the crowd cheer as the bleachers shake as the home team retreats from the field with the victory Kevin MacMunn <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)"> Good job. I like the beginning line. You have a few spelling and comma errors. Receiver is misspelled; end zone is one word; running back's footsteps would be correct <span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'"> **__ I Hear the Sounds of American Football __** --Josh Spence and Hunter Smith <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">This could have been better if you had continued with the sounds... You have helmets colliding, but then you move away from the sounds.
 * I hear the stands going crazy as Tim Tebow throws the football down field. **
 * I hear Troy Polamolou hitting, helmets colliding, and fans cheering. **
 * I hear Derrick Brooks sacking with his cleats tearing up the field. **
 * I hear Hines Ward catching the ball while his gloves stick and the terrible towels wave. **
 * I hear Warrick Dunn’s pads clashing as he runs into the end zone. **

I hear my friends laughing I hear my friends laughing, as they drive out of the school I hear Liz laughing, as she does her sets at swim practice in her suit and goggles I hear Hillary laughing, as she drives around town aimlessly searching for a place to chill I hear Kimmy laughing, as she stuffs her face full of celery and chips I hear Mike laughing, and he texts mulitiple girls on his phone ~Elisabeth Stewart & Hillary Forster <span style="color: rgb(230, 20, 20)">A summary line or two would have tied this together. Why are they so happy.